Pep Talk - WHRN 2009 - Oh noes! Killing your characters! by zeuslover1

Okay, for some this is easy, for some you dread this moment and procrastinate. Almost every novelist(that doesn't do juvenilles) has a death in his/her novel. I'm going to go step by step through the process, let's just hope this pep talk is good. Let's start with an example...

EXAMPLE:
Jared and Luke were walking. Then, they were faced with their enemy, Demian. Jared took out his sword and swung. Demain killed Jared. Luke killed Demain.

Obviously, this is NOT a good death scene. First, it does not depicts *Where or *Whom .

EXAMPLE:
Jared and Luke, best friends, were walking down the ruined streets of Elishi. Then, they were faced with their mortal enemy, Demian, who was the evil king at that time. Jared and Luke took out their swords and swung. Demian killed Jared and Luke killed Demian.

Better... but it doesn't say exactly *How they killed each other!

EXAMPLE:
Jared and Luke, best friends, were walking down the ruined streets of Elishi. Then, they were faced with their mortal enemy, Demian, who was the evil king at this time. Jared and Luke took out their swords and swung. Demin killed Jared with his sword going through his body. Luke killed Demian by slashing off his head.

Okay! For me, I like gory pictures and to better paint a picture you use *Adjectives, *Adverbs, and *Prepositions. Feel like your really there.

EXAMPLE:
Fearless, Jared and Luke, best friends since the beginning of time strolled down the ruined, abandoned streets of Elishi. Suddenly, they were faced with their ruthless, mortal enemy, Demain, who was the evil and melicious king at this time. Jared and Luke quicklyu unsheathed their sharp swords and slashed at Demian. Demian killed Jared mercilessly with his bloody sword going straight through Jared's limp and lifeless body. Luke, enraged, killed Demian by slcing his head off. It fell to the ground. The body fell slowly after.

Even better! If you wanted to you could stop right there, but let's go even further. *Dialoge is great to depict scenes like these. It shows the protagoniast's (or antagonist's) feelings better than adjectives, adverbs or prepositions(but those are great in a death scene too). I'm going to add a little more sentences too, to make it all come together.

EXAMPLE:
Fearless, Jared and Luke, best friends since the beginning of time strolled down the ruined, abandoned streets of Elishi.
"Something's not right," Jared said as he walked down the street.
Suddenly, they were faced with their ruthless, mortal enemy, Demain, who was the evil and melicious king at this time. Jared and Luke quicklyu unsheathed their sharp swords and slashed at Demian. Demian killed Jared mercilessly with his bloody sword going straight through Jared's limp and lifeless body.
"You bastard! I'll have you for that!" Luke said, enraged.
"And what are you going to do, boy?" Demian mocked, making Luke even angrier.
Luke killed Demian by slicing his head off with his sharp sword. There was no sound. Demian's head fell to the ground. The body fell slowly after. Luke knelt by his friend's dead and lifeless body.

You could make it more actiony or descriptive, but that's for you to chose. Use your imagination when killing off a character(s). It can be fun! (It is for me!) So, remember,
*Where
*Whom
*How
*Adjectives
*Adverbs
*Prepositions
& *Dialoge